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This story contains yaoi (boyxboy). Anyone who doesn't like this I suggest you read it and comment what's wrong about it. That way I can have my laughter. Those who do like gay couples... enjoy reading!
Summary: During a war between Angels and Vampires, a forbidden love develops.


Good evening, my dear host.
I try not to look at him as he's descending the stairs, though, I'm more cautious than usual. His eyes are not filled with the common despair and aggression, which makes me feel slightly scared.
I keep looking at him as he is watching me, making me wonder what he's thinking about. What is he thinking about, when his hand is touching,- no! punching - me? Some silly tingling feeling spreads from the spot he slammed me, throughout my whole body. I think it would hurt madly if I hadn't closed my mind off from my feelings.
Subtle isn't a word you'll find in his dictionary, neither is variation, so I just play along and take every hit he gives.

Hanging motionless; his hurting has stopped and I see another person in front of me. His dark hair covers the crying face. And…who is Eveline?
I want him to feel guilty, it's pity I feel. His sobbing makes me want to soothe him, lock him up in my arms and tell everything is going to be all right. Everyone can make mistakes, forgiveness is the best healing. I know this, that's why I am an Angel.

The warmth of his breath reaches my neck. Now it's going to happen… still, I keep my emotions away from him. He will not hear a single word from me! Just when I begin to wonder how it would feel to be bitten, I get astounded by a wet and warm stroke of… something. As he smears the tears of his cheek on mine, I ask myself if vampires really cry blood like in those fairytales people use to tell. How badly I want to know, I keep my eyes shut tight, waiting for what's to come.
Suddenly his arms are wrapped around me and I get both afraid yet excited. His body is warm, which surprises me since I always thought vampires would be cold. I mean, they're kind of pale. An unexpected gasp escapes me.

Shame fills me, when I realise I don't want him to stop, and he seems ashamed too, turning his head away from me.
How beautiful his eyes actually are! Pale grey, like a winter's day on which the sun would greet the first fresh snow. Oh, I could drown into those eyes.

"What's your name?"
What is my name? His sudden speaking startles me and I feel I'm letting my guard down. I curse out loud, but immediately apologise afterwards. Disgraceful am I and that's what he'll think too, probably.
"Taÿos."
I mumble, my voice sounds awful so I decide to keep my answers steady but short. It must have been some time since I last talked. Kind of funny to think that in Heaven I was the biggest chatterbox of them all. Now my only 'friend' is some grumpy Vampire of whom I don't even know the name and I wish not to ask for it!...
"Wha…what..t…ttis y…y…yours?"
The cold is making me mutter terribly and I feel even more ashamed than I already was. I wish I never let my guard down! Desperately, I look away, trying pull myself together again. The Vampire is looking into my eyes intensely. His expression doesn't change and the more I feel uncomfortable. My heart is pounding loudly in my chest and many thoughts intrude my mind. I can sense him enjoying my bewilderment. Trying to get a grip on myself, I only feel myself slip away more and more. Darkness falls over me and I pass out, finally.
Guess tonight wasn't that usual at all.
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And some other update... for all the Sunday readers. Thursday I shall be uploading for BL-club (if they're even going to accept my other update...)

How funny you can already see a downfall of views... and I'm not even halfway yet. However, I don't care and I hope those faithful lovely readers will like my story 'till the end.

Enjoy!

p.s. Oh, my I really have nothing interesting to tell really.

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LOVING THE STORY
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~Ragamuffin-Asa Aug 14, 2010  Student General Artist
Thank you :)
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~Moonless-Love Feb 26, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
wow this is really good! :D I really like how you alternate between the angel and vampire points of view. it lets you see what theyre both thinking
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~Ragamuffin-Asa Feb 27, 2010  Student General Artist
Thank you ^^ I'm glad you like that. Though it's not just me... I've only been writing the Angel's point of view. The Vampire's side has been written by kreatio.deviantart.com.
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~Moonless-Love Feb 28, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
well its still REALLY good!
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~bluelgummies Feb 24, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
what an awesome story!!!! >u<
surprised that i didn't come across it earlier...well, i'm glad that i did now though! x3
this is a peculiar, original and anticipating story...gawd, and the plot-hangers are subtle and well-placed...heh, in english: i can't wait for the next chapter!!!
minor grammatical/spelling errors, nothing drastic nor reading-process-distracting (unless you're annoying like me...lulz... x.x)
pity that they're short, the chapters...
i can see that this is going along the path of "LE INTERESTING" x3333
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~Ragamuffin-Asa Feb 24, 2010  Student General Artist
Hehe... I started with this story to improve my English actually. So true, I'm sure there will be quite some mistakes in there ^^' It has been some while ago too... I began writing with it. Gladly my girlfriend (the Vampire in this tale) helped me alot as well.

The chapters will grow longer eventually. We were both kind of nervous when starting with it, not knowing exactly what would happen and how the other would respond to it. So later on chapters will get longer (if I'm not mistaken the longest chapters takes 2,5 pages)

But thanks a lot for the compliment ^^ I'm glad you like it so.
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~bluelgummies Feb 24, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
hmm, well, gotta say that this is pretty well written for practice :meow:
ohhh....wait, you wrote the angel-p.o.w. and she wrote the vampire p.o.w??? that sounds so aces :D

yays! now i'm officially excited OuO i like long chapters in interesting stories >u<

and you're very welcome, glad that there are good stories to stalk out here :heart:
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~Ragamuffin-Asa Feb 24, 2010  Student General Artist
Hehe! I'm very eager to improve my English and I think there's no better way but writing. ^^' Anyway, I'm sure you will come across many more errors and such though.

I find it lovely to be writing together because it keeps you motivated to keep on going. This counts for me at least. And yes, I know my girlfriend for 5/6 years now, so you can say we're almost one ^^'

I hope you will keep enjoying the story. Oh, and if you don't please tell as well... Criticism is always welcome ^^
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~bluelgummies Feb 24, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
sure will do :)
heh, trust me, i speak my mind >u<
when do you upload the next chapter? sunday? :eager:
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